Great work Hilary.
I am pleased to see you making improvements as such.
Try to contextualize the observation of structure grammatical function. Eg as is the comparison subordinate clause….rather than saying it means subordinate to another, give the details of what clause in this verse it is subordinate to.
Look at the good job you did with the mordifiers. You did not just say it modifies something but you were precise about the part of the verse it modifies. This is what I mean by contextualizing. The purpose of structure is to see how different parts relate to each other so you should identify the parts that are relating to each other.
Great steps already understanding the different phases of interpretation: definitive, rational and implicational.
Great work overall,
See you tomorrow!